Sailor Moon Crystal…and it’s many Writing flaws…


So,  I’ve been taking time off of my blog to work on my manuscript. So, in the course of two weeks, I first caught a cold, and then cracked my toe so now I’m stuck with a boot.


It gives me time to also catch up on my Sailor Moon Crystal, which is sad.

Let me explain. Growing up, I loved Sailor Moon, I had the manga, the dolls, the DVDs, etc., but watching it close to 30, I start to see things differently. I mean, I do love the artwork. It’s actually very similar to the manga.


It’s beautiful to see Princess Serenity in her original form as Naoko Takeuchi had originally intended, but sometimes, this beauty can be jarring. The color scheme actually reminds me of No Game No Life. Though, unlike Sailor Moon, No Game No Life is built around action.


It’s not ugly, it’s just slightly jarring because I’m waiting for something to blow up or some huge monster to come out of the shadows.

Despite all of my complaining, there are something that I do like about the series:


  1. There is a more modern feel to the series. Everybody knows how to use a laptop, and there are cell phones present. sailor-moon-crystal-2-11
  2. All the side arcs from the original series are removed, such as Allen and Ann. 248403033I mean, they weren’t awful, but they seemed slightly out of place. I thought they were cute, but I thought their arc dragged along a bit much. And, the Dark Talent Arc was not included, thank goodness. They were…meh…
  3. The senshi are given more action scenes when doing an attack. inner_senshi_attack_gif_by_princess_tiffany-d81ae6m
  4. Mamoru Chiba is a high school student instead of a college student. I don’t know about you, but when I found out after reading the manga that Mamoru was in college at the time, it kind of bothered me. sailor_moon_crystal_03_mamoru_chiba_school_idThough, the age of consent in Japan is 13, so I can’t be too…I’m sorry, that just grosses me out.

But, for everything I just talk about there a few things that keep it from reaching its full potential. It may have something to do with  the fact that I’m an African-American, with an emphasis on American, but I try to be a bit open minded about different cultures but some things just annoy me.

  1. The men in the series end up being complete jerks, or they’re useless. Now, I will give credit that Mamoru does more than stand around, and he’s a bit more than a sperm donor, but there are times I wish that he would stand up to his future wife and daughter when they whine. a737771c83edf4253f26ee7068a25897
  2. Usagi’s parents never ask where she’s been and, there’s no mention of any other relatives for the other senshi. Japanese teens go to school 6 days a week and I’m trying to figure out how they’re not failing. Then again, the manga makes it clear that they study for exams, where there’s absence fo that. b927984899c841f7223ed0efa4e4be64
  3. Usagi should be more mature than what she is. The manga series sees Usagi maturing over time, but the anime still has a tendency for Usagi to whine a lot. What used to be comedy to me seems to be annoying, especially when it comes to Usagi and Chibi-Usa fighting. maxresdefaultBesides the fact that it makes Usagi feel like she’s 14, this is her daughter fighting for her future-husband’s affection is just..ugh.. Again, this has something to do with the fact that I’m older, so those negative facts dig into the back of my head.

Don’t get me wrong, I love Sailor Moon, it just that some things mess with my head a bit. I just wish sometimes that Magical Girl genre could appeal better to a mature audience. Then again, Josei is the other series for older women.

The other thing is, if Sailor Moon, manga or anime could get better, there would be some things I would re-write:

  1. Less dependency on Mamoru. He’s a great guy, it’s just that with her whining, it takes away from her development into a beautiful queen.
  2. Have the characters actually study and show that there’s more than flashy colors and twirling. Girls who are brainy are valued too, and the better grades in Japan, the more likely you are to get into a good college or a great job. Pretty Guardian Sailor Moon, for all of its flaws, did show some good futures for the senshi, including Ami become a doctor for a British Hospital.
  3. The future needs to be changed. All fans know that Usagi becomes the Queen of Earth, gets rid of all diseases, and people live over a thousand years. But, all evil is to be rid of from Earth. The problem is, though, it seems like free will taken from the planet. That may be the crux of the fact that there was no free will, so the planet became boring.

So, that’s the feel of the Sailor Moon Crystal. The entire Sailor Moon Series will always be in my heart, but there are just a few flaws that are apparent to me.

What about you?
Have you noticed anything about Sailor Moon Crystal that is become a somewhat glaring problem?

~L.C. Clements



Re-Wrting Your Entire Draft Is Hard….


So, I’m re-writing my entire first draft from scratch, and I hate it. I feel like part Takano and part Ritsu as I’m writing.

sekai-ichi-hatsukoi-full-411983If you don’t know who these two are, I’m not surpised if you’re not an anime, manga, or even..dare I say it…yaoi fan.

Yes, I fully admit to liking yaoi, which got me into reading gay erotic novels…

10481997_652412108184270_5622343190792635853_oIt’s that dirty little secret that try to keep under wraps, but husband found out and he just shakes his head at it. Seriously, he’s doing it right now. I would record him but I made a pact with him that I would keep him out of my otaku-ness as much as possible.

Now, if you’ve gotten curious about Sekai-Ichi Hatsukoi, I would recommend it…if you’re not too vanilla about relationships. In actuality, this relationship between two men could work. In fact, the writer has it so that even if the second protagonist was female, it would be still the same parallel relationship. I talk about this in another post about characterizaiton. Right now, I want to get back on track about revising my entire work.

So I’ve been spending time either on my Ipad working on my fanfiction and also re-writing my manuscript. Believe it or not, I actually get the manuscript chapter done before I write my fanficiton chapters. It’s sort of a reward for myself when I get some things done. However, this is what I’ve been going through working with this:


To top it al off, I still have the first manuscript that I could possibly read over to get ideas, but then that makes me angirer. Have any of you ever read you frist draft? Now the writing process in school used to look like this:


If you went to school in the United States, you probably remember this in elementary school. It’s still similar, but it’s more condensed to this:


or this:

Welcome to the nightmare of taking English or Lit classes in college. I look at this to wonder if I was an outiner, or a pantser. I think I’m more in the latter. Part of this has something to do with the aforementioned classes in college, and don’t forget the stupid papers you had to write in high school in MLA or APA format.

So, in short, I’m in revision hell. Is anybody else out there dealing wit h this?




What I Learned Writing Fanfiction


Ok, so if you you haven’t guessed from the title, I write fan fiction.

(Yes, cue the lack of me being what they call ‘a real writer’ here.)

The two most recent I’m working on right now is Star Vs. The Forces of Evil and Undertale. These are not the most thought-provoking adult material…well, Undertale could be interpreted that way, but I’m interested in these two series. Star Vs. The Forces of Evil brings out my love of shojo/ magical girl and Daron Nefcey making fun of it.

Undertale…is like Doctor Who for me, just a guilty pleasure. Toby Fox really outshines himself with taking something like Mother (Earthbound) and expanding on that lore and other J-RPGs that involve kids in dangerous, adult-like situations. Yes, it sounds somewhat horrible, but don’t many of us love drama?

Why do I write fan fiction?

  1. It’s great practice. If you have ever read fan fan fiction reviews, you can gauge just what readers like and don’t like. Now, that only appeals to the genre you’re writing, but fans know when you’re writing too far out of character.
  2. It’s fun. Let’s face it, we’ve all been there where one show has royally pissed us off and we wanted to change the ending (*cough, cough* Breaking Bad), so why not have fun with it?
  3. Fan fiction reviewers are some of the biggest critics you’ll read on a post. Yes, don’t think about editors and big time editors that will someday read your draft and possibly throw it in the trash. No, you should be thinking about the reviewers that post to your stories. You know why? The same people that follow you on the fan fiction trail are probably the same people that will read you work.

Now, what I’ve learned from fan fiction is patience. You can post all you want and not get a single follower. This means waiting up all night for that one review that you hope will be a great review.


So, where does this come in when it comes to fiction writing? Well, once you get that one review, it catches on. If you have ever gone to or Wattpad, you start to notice stars or comments. It only takes one vote to catch on, and you’re off. The problem is…the waiting game.

I first started writing a Star vs. fan fiction back in March, and I only had 2 followers. Now, I’ve got 12. Not something to write home about, but something to think about  My other fan fiction is Undertale, and it’s starting to take off as well.

So, when trying to write your draft, think about writing fan fiction if you have time as practice and a way to gather an audience.

If anybody here wants to give my fan fiction a spin, check me out on: shindouga1

Wattapad: shindougal

~L.C. Clements